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Rabiat

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Re: Typos
« Reply #45 on: July 19, 2007, 06:53 »

Quote from: tsiphone
The full thing goes as following The humanity! My big gun is out of bullets! I cant believe it!. As a bit of extra nitpicking maybe bullets should be changed to ammo as the BFG, plasma rifle and rocket launcher dont use bullets and Id say they are pretty big guns ;-).

If I'm not mistaken this 'humanity' quote is taken straight from the Doom comic (which admittedly has some pretty schizoid monologue in it). ;)

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Re: Typos
« Reply #46 on: July 19, 2007, 06:59 »

Well, if you just say bullets you have a specific image in your head, which I think is OK.  Often I go a bit nuts with the chaingun and find I've run out when in the middle of a running battle, and the reload skill comes in handy then.

I think the humanity thing works, because it's drawing from the Hindenberg disaster quote from the journalist who witnessed the crash.  Although it's not a huge tragedy :) "Oh, the humanity!"

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Re: Typos
« Reply #47 on: July 19, 2007, 07:12 »

Yeah, the humanity is a direct quote, so it stays like it is. I like such word games anyway xP. As for monster descriptions, they were made up in one (not neccessarily sober) evening, so they basically are just there. If someone would like to come up with new ones, I'd be more than happy. Preferably in the spirit of Derek's and Malek's trait descriptions :). But I'll try to fix the mentioned typos for the next version.
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Re: Typos
« Reply #48 on: July 19, 2007, 07:19 »

Argh, I just read the Doom comic.  I think it was funny in its own way, not terribly dramatic...  The main character sorta reminded me of all the idiots who comment on Youtube and the like, all welded into a single person.

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Re: Typos
« Reply #49 on: July 19, 2007, 07:59 »

It is still more true to the Doom game than the Doom Movie xP.
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Re: Typos
« Reply #50 on: July 19, 2007, 08:10 »

I remember way back when I first heard there might be a Doom movie.  I was all excited, just like when I first heard they were throwing concepts around for Aliens vs. Predator.  But so many years passed I stopped caring.  And from what I've heard about both movies (I've not seen either of them) it's a good thing!
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Re: Typos
« Reply #51 on: July 19, 2007, 14:48 »

"The humanity" is part of a quote taken from the Doom Comic, and as such would be diluted by alterations (because it would then no longer be a quote, and as fun).
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Re: Typos
« Reply #52 on: July 28, 2007, 12:21 »

As a native English speaker some of the sentences in the game read very strangely to me.

Here's how the Arena text appears:

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Game loaded. Welcome to the Doom Roguelike... A devilish voice out of
nowhere announces: "Welcome to Hell's Arena mortal!" "You are either
very foolish, or very brave. Either way I like it!" "And so do the crowds!"
Suddenly you hear screams everywhere! : "Blood! Blood! BLOOD!" The
voice booms again "Kill all enemies and I shall reward thee!"

Here's how I think it should appear:

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Game loaded. Welcome to the Doom Roguelike! A devilish voice
announces, "Welcome to Hell's Arena, mortal!" -more-
"You are either very foolish, or very brave. Either way I like it!" -more-
"And so do the crowds!" Suddenly you hear screams everywhere! -more-
"Blood! Blood! BLOOD!" The voice booms again "Kill all enemies and I shall reward thee!"

Pointing out the fact that the voice comes out of nowhere strikes me as rather redundant, as using the word 'voice' without attaching any sort of specific pronoun or name inherently gives it the quality of being disembodied. Adding to that, separating multiple speaking parts using " " doesn't really work that well unless you insert a line break, see novels etc. for reference.

In all instances where the voice is speaking, it seems that this syntax is used: 'The voice booms : "!"' where it should be 'The voice booms, "!"'. 'You hear screams everywhere! : "Blood!"' changes to 'You hear screams everywhere! "Blood!'. There are a ton of such typos in the Arena.

Past that, some of the trait descriptions bother me. Here's Finesse, for example.

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Have you heard of an itchy trigger
 finger? Yours are itchier than the
 chicken pox, and because of that you
 can squeeze out a round of fire 10%
 faster with every trait level you
 advance.

Where to me, it should read like this:

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Have you heard of an itchy trigger
 finger? Yours are itchier than the
 chicken pox, and because of that you
 can fire rounds 10% faster with every
 level of this trait.

Fixed redundancy issues and cleaned up the sentence structure a bit.

Son of a Bitch is also a bit misleading:

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because you do 1 more damage every level than your average marine.
Should be something like this:

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because with every level of this trait, you do 1 more damage than your average Marine.
Son of a gun reads "at top condition", should be "in top condition".

Might I also suggest that the names of the armors be changed to "Light Armor", "Combat Armor", "Megaarmor"? That's pretty much what they're called in DooM.

Well, that's it for now. I'll come back sometime later with more probably.
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Re: Typos
« Reply #53 on: January 20, 2008, 09:19 »

Text when using Trigun's special ability: "Do you wan't to use the dangerous Angel Arm?? [Y/n]"
Should be "Do you want to use the dangerous Angel Arm?? [Y/n]"
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Re: Typos
« Reply #54 on: January 26, 2008, 10:49 »

A few more from me.  ;)

From unix_notes.txt:
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1. DoomRL looks for it's data files ...
Missing comma after compensation in AoB description:
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As a compensation Large Healing Globes work on you like a Berserk Pack!
The Brute description still has an apostrophe:
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You don't need a gun - gun's are for wusses!
Edit:

Picking up anything with a full inventory:
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You don't have enough place in your backpack.
« Last Edit: January 26, 2008, 15:04 by Picklish »
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Re: Typos
« Reply #55 on: February 05, 2008, 12:11 »

from this mortem:
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3 sacrificed itself for the good of mankind.
Should be
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3 sacrificed themselves for the good of mankind.
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Re: Typos
« Reply #56 on: March 19, 2008, 22:56 »

In the AoD description "harbringer" should be "harbinger".

Also, when you exit The Wall without killing all the enemies, it says "Hearing them scream soothens the soul...";
"soothens" should be "soothes".

(PS: I love this game.)

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Additionally in the JC description it says "...word lof mercy..."; it should be "...word of mercy...".
« Last Edit: March 20, 2008, 16:19 by tehtmi »
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Re: Typos
« Reply #57 on: April 02, 2008, 11:08 »

From the wiki manual linked.

Watch this space carefully – it may notify you of impending danger or tell you that you're out of ammo (poor sob!).
SOB or sod (pretty please?)

By default your tactic is "cautious". This tactic gives no benefits, but either gives no disadvantages.
nor

First - there are listed your main parameters: movement, firing and reloading speed, and also your chance to hit with the weapon you are currently wearing (from point blank range).
currently have equipped (you do not wear a weapon)

Second good thing that you can find there are parameters of equipment that you are wearing:
have (you do not wear a weapon)

(yes, armor and boots can affect your movement speed and chance to be knocked back by powerful attacks)
redundant(?)

Each common weapon and armor can hold 1 mod (without traits), so choose wisely, which parameter you need to upgrade.
redundant(?)

By default advanced weapon have no bonuses against common
advantages over

There are 2 ways to see one of them: complete certain special level, in which unique item is a reward, or wait for level generator to spawn it on common level (but this happens pretty rare).
rarely

Edit: Bold did not show up in quote.
Edit 2: Clarifications
« Last Edit: April 02, 2008, 11:33 by tisiphone »
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Re: Typos
« Reply #58 on: April 04, 2008, 05:37 »

Note to self - all typos up to this place fixed.
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